Short story - (pub yarn) 'Devil Pact'

http://www.writingforums.org/entry.php?b=4495


Part of entering these writingforums.org short story comps was to put me out of my comfort zone.  Going into the story I knew I wanted to write a quirky fireside tale in a strange style.  I tried writing something "to be spoken aloud".  


Personally I think it worked fairly well - some of the prose looks pretty clunky on the page, but that's mainly because the rhythm & wording is for speaking rather than reading.